a beginning of a new chapter

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Ashes of creation we are the new story built upon the old: the lore is what was, and what is in the world. The story is in what and how we interact with the the world and eachother, as the world interacts with us.

We are the Ashen,
We lived through the burning and death.
A world of creation turned to ashes under a burning sky.

Scarred and battered,
Skin caked with ash,
Still we rise!
Life, death, perseverance.

Burnt sky above
Scorched earth below
Here we stand blackened
in a world left in ashes

We are the Ashen
In a world of desolation
Hope we have,
For we know like a phoenix

Life will rise
from the ashes
Life will rise
Form the desolation and ashes

We are the Ashlings
Born of the ashes,
We rise

No matter what kind
of destruction or death
We will be here

For,.. life will rise
And return
Life death rebirth
Life will rise

What is become of the old? What will come of the new? These are the quests that the world bears.

Comments

  • Hurrah
  • ArchivedUserArchivedUser Guest
    edited June 2017
    What is an Ashen? sounds like a failed hollywood couple. maybe change the last sentence from "bears" sounds funny a bit. 
  • ArchivedUserArchivedUser Guest
    edited June 2017
    makinoji said:
    What is an Ashen? sounds like a failed hollywood couple. maybe change the  last sentence from "bears" sounds funny a bit
    Lol, not so much a thing but more of a state of being. (Has to do with being burned by money grabbing companies in mmos), think of it as something that has been through so many fires that it now has ash embedded all over it like a shell or skin

    Yeah the bears thing bugs me too not sure what to put there instead, it hard not to think of it as a bear(the animal) and more as bearing something on your shoulders
    Edited because I missed your edit @makinoji
  • makinoji said:
    What is an Ashen? sounds like a failed hollywood couple. maybe change the last sentence from "bears" sounds funny a bit. 

    Ashen is watashi-tachi no alternative namae, we are Hui-Chan, We are Eshi-Kun, We are Ashian, We are Ashiringu(Ashling) Oretachi wa Kawaii desu  <3<3<3     #EshizuObuKureishonクリーエーション



    Such kawaii!!

  • The feedback is nice
  • Made changes to op
  • Stand together my comrades!
    We set foot on this fresh soil untouched for centuries! We are pioneers!

    Going beyond that which we thought we had to find new and wonderful sights. Do you hold fear in your hearts at the unknown ahead? FEAR NOT for together as one people as one we can become great. Yes we will bicker and yes we will fight amongst ourselves but that is not what will define us.

    To be better than we were to find new lands for our people that is what we are here for! Now you may seek on your own and shun those of us who stand as one but know this. We all have a place and a part and even if you hate or disown me... I will stand with you in this brave new world.
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